Hi Everyone!
I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what Du think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t Du see?” She sagte icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his krippe and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the krippe and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the krippe and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are Du saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They sagte that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And Du think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil sagte flatly, “He obviously has your feuer using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what Du think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t Du see?” She sagte icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his krippe and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the krippe and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the krippe and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are Du saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They sagte that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And Du think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil sagte flatly, “He obviously has your feuer using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
i dindnt say anything for a minute,then i spoke.
'do Du know why?"
'well,she sagte something about an old friend in texas." izzy told me.
"you dont think.."
"maybe.where else could she have gone?"
"come Von my house after school,i have plan."
After school,izzy came over.We went to my room.
"what are we gonna do?"izzy asked,as soon as she walked in the room.
"wee gonig to find aslee" i siad,trying to sound as serious as possible.
"youre kidding,right? i mean,where are we gonna go?"izzy said.
"texas"
she stared at me.Blankly.Not saying a thing.As if she was gonna drop dead.
"izzy?"i asked,trying to get her back to reality.
"you must be on drugs," she said
"what?"
"youve got to be joking me.i mean,your mom is not gonig to take us,my mom is dead,and theres no way ere gonna..wait...your not saying?
"yep,wee going to texas"
'do Du know why?"
'well,she sagte something about an old friend in texas." izzy told me.
"you dont think.."
"maybe.where else could she have gone?"
"come Von my house after school,i have plan."
After school,izzy came over.We went to my room.
"what are we gonna do?"izzy asked,as soon as she walked in the room.
"wee gonig to find aslee" i siad,trying to sound as serious as possible.
"youre kidding,right? i mean,where are we gonna go?"izzy said.
"texas"
she stared at me.Blankly.Not saying a thing.As if she was gonna drop dead.
"izzy?"i asked,trying to get her back to reality.
"you must be on drugs," she said
"what?"
"youve got to be joking me.i mean,your mom is not gonig to take us,my mom is dead,and theres no way ere gonna..wait...your not saying?
"yep,wee going to texas"
Sobriety is beyond a horizon for you,
One Du won't be alive to even get to.
Your mind is set to be dead in 10
Years, my fears, my tears,
don't matter, your emotionless, here.
My bothersome phone calls,
"I'm just checking in"
"Yeah, I don't care"
I can't ever win.
My eyes are taped open,
horrific Bilder replay,
and even when I close them,
they're imprinted in my mind,
they're there to stay.
Blackness engulfs me,
like a whirlpool of nothing,
Your arch nemesis,
Your pal,
Your meaningless suffering.
Why do Du do this,
to yourself, and to me?
I don't get why Du mess around,
just let yourself be!
One Du won't be alive to even get to.
Your mind is set to be dead in 10
Years, my fears, my tears,
don't matter, your emotionless, here.
My bothersome phone calls,
"I'm just checking in"
"Yeah, I don't care"
I can't ever win.
My eyes are taped open,
horrific Bilder replay,
and even when I close them,
they're imprinted in my mind,
they're there to stay.
Blackness engulfs me,
like a whirlpool of nothing,
Your arch nemesis,
Your pal,
Your meaningless suffering.
Why do Du do this,
to yourself, and to me?
I don't get why Du mess around,
just let yourself be!
this is just somthing that describes me :)
love bites
I'm haunted by the memory's i hold
Impossible
Here I phase
Here in my old age
Here I run with no place to go
Here I stand with no purpose
Here I am with no show,
No lights,no cameras,no grace
Here I am with this world having me in it's tight embrace.
But I won't give in.
For God Loved me so.
Here I am in this place,
Here I am just watching the world race.
Watching the world fall apart,
Here I am just waiting for a new start.
As this breaks my heart,
I know I will Mitmachen God's cart,his army,his people and I will live in heaven above.
Here I am asking you,
What will Du do?
Here I am watching Du phase,
Here I am watching Du turn to old age.
With no place to go,
Here I am telling Du don't want to low.
As we change and as we grow,
This world will face judgment,This I know.
Don't turn to old age,
Don't get Lost in the world's maze.
Save Du self.
Don't let yourself phase.......
Here in my old age
Here I run with no place to go
Here I stand with no purpose
Here I am with no show,
No lights,no cameras,no grace
Here I am with this world having me in it's tight embrace.
But I won't give in.
For God Loved me so.
Here I am in this place,
Here I am just watching the world race.
Watching the world fall apart,
Here I am just waiting for a new start.
As this breaks my heart,
I know I will Mitmachen God's cart,his army,his people and I will live in heaven above.
Here I am asking you,
What will Du do?
Here I am watching Du phase,
Here I am watching Du turn to old age.
With no place to go,
Here I am telling Du don't want to low.
As we change and as we grow,
This world will face judgment,This I know.
Don't turn to old age,
Don't get Lost in the world's maze.
Save Du self.
Don't let yourself phase.......
