im Schreiben a story and the ppl that are Lesen tell me its amazing but no one really followes it what should i do??? so ppl would take me serioisly????

my story is named black moon its kind of dramatic <3 this are the Links tell me what u think!
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thats chapter 1 and 2
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thats chapter 3 and every Tag i post a new one plz plz read and tell me if its good oder not! thanks