this is an English sonnet I had to write for my English class and I need to know if it is good oder not before I Abschicken it, thank you. also the rhyme scheme is ababcdcdefefgg
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My dear Liebe Du once were a shining ray.
In my eyes Du meant the whole world to me.
Now everything about Du is a shade of gray.
Like your beauty, your emotions, and your Liebe is what I see.
However we must part onto our new paths.
Because our Liebe is coming to its new close.
Farben were a beauty but now gray spreads its wrath.
I would Liebe to feel again but now it’s a ghost.
Our Liebe has left this earth for old times’ sake.
But when our Liebe left it took Du along too.
Sadly it left me with all this heartache.
Dying Liebe was something I wish I had clues to
If someone told me Liebe would never be easy
I would have chosen another path that’s breezy
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My dear Liebe Du once were a shining ray.
In my eyes Du meant the whole world to me.
Now everything about Du is a shade of gray.
Like your beauty, your emotions, and your Liebe is what I see.
However we must part onto our new paths.
Because our Liebe is coming to its new close.
Farben were a beauty but now gray spreads its wrath.
I would Liebe to feel again but now it’s a ghost.
Our Liebe has left this earth for old times’ sake.
But when our Liebe left it took Du along too.
Sadly it left me with all this heartache.
Dying Liebe was something I wish I had clues to
If someone told me Liebe would never be easy
I would have chosen another path that’s breezy
crashed and faded
Von the fate
that follows
the land
on which
you're standing.
Dreams
are dead...
Fighting for
better days
now seems so
vainly,
everything went
wrong.
Dreams are
broken
in so many nights
that echo
along with
dust of past.
Put yourself
together
and hold on
to something
good,
Du might survive,
Du might escape
from the fate
that follows
the land
on which
you're standing.
Days are black
and cold,
nights spent
in despair
and thinking.
Your fate is
bounded to
the land
on which
you're standing.
What we have we won’t give
Up to any without a fight
Our ancestors gave us this birth right
We just want to live in peace
But still the battles will not cease
Until we’re driven from our home
Then we would be left to roam
And settle in some other place
oder wiped out with no trace
Our names they wouldn’t know
So we prepare to meet our foe
The tribal headdress worn with pride
And paint upon our skin to hide
Who they face upon the field
Armed with arrows, spear & shield
Seen as men within a crowd
Surging forth we holler aloud
No fear from us will be shown
As they meet the unknown
Warriors not afraid to die
Fighting for our cause we try
To save our land & family
So our tribe can be free
To live as we choose to do
So let battle now ensue