An idea popped into my head the other Tag and its been playing like a little movie in my head ever since. I really need to know if its any good, oder if the idea has already been used. Also I need Guter Rat for the characters and their names. I also appreciate constructive criticism and grammar and spelling. The names are temporary. I've never written a book that is completely in the present tense so please help me catch any tense mistakes! Um, oh yeah. It doesn't have a Titel yet so if Du have any suggestions just let me know!
(: Thanks!
-Carly
The story is jumbled a bit. It is because the characters are experiencing tough times and can't think straight, so since they tell it, the story is a little jumpy.
Here is a a short Vorschau of the 1st chapter to an unnamed story in the making along with a summary of the book.
"Good morning," I hear the principal say as she does every day. Normally, I would politely respond to that with a "Thank Du Mrs. Monrale, Du too," but today I am pissed. How can she say that?! It was awful of her to say such a thing! It is most definitely not a good morning, I mutter to myself as she is all the way down the hallway now.
I pace around, taking a long route to my locker where, as always, the two cheerleaders on either side of my locker are cheerfully chatting. Normally I would say "Excuse me," but today I'm not normal. I can't bring myself to say WHY I'm so abnormal today. I'm not ready to get into that yet. Today is awful, life is just a dismay, people are always in your way, the principal is disgusting, the cheerleaders are horrid, and I am mad - mad at everyone and everything, everywhere.
That is a Vorschau of chapter one, in the the female protagonist, Josepheenah's point of view.
Here is a summary of the whole book:
Ever since Josepheenah sagte the words "I wish you'd just die, Eli," she has never stopped regretting them. Jo and Eli really got along until he decided to fall in Liebe with her. He loved the pool of brown in her eyes and the black mess of hair that she had always hated. Eli found her laugher to be Musik to his ears. Her voice was melodic and always on key. Jo always knew what to say to him, until she says the last words Eli ever heard her say. She took none of this seriously. But Eli would do anything Jo wanted. They were at her house at the time, so when Jo got up to get them a snack, he gave her what she asked for. Jo comes back to messages written on her mirror in blood, and balled up Liebe notes Eli never had the guts to give to her. Read the novel to get the story from both sides, and how everything turns out in the end.
Thanks for helping me out! x :)
(: Thanks!
-Carly
The story is jumbled a bit. It is because the characters are experiencing tough times and can't think straight, so since they tell it, the story is a little jumpy.
Here is a a short Vorschau of the 1st chapter to an unnamed story in the making along with a summary of the book.
"Good morning," I hear the principal say as she does every day. Normally, I would politely respond to that with a "Thank Du Mrs. Monrale, Du too," but today I am pissed. How can she say that?! It was awful of her to say such a thing! It is most definitely not a good morning, I mutter to myself as she is all the way down the hallway now.
I pace around, taking a long route to my locker where, as always, the two cheerleaders on either side of my locker are cheerfully chatting. Normally I would say "Excuse me," but today I'm not normal. I can't bring myself to say WHY I'm so abnormal today. I'm not ready to get into that yet. Today is awful, life is just a dismay, people are always in your way, the principal is disgusting, the cheerleaders are horrid, and I am mad - mad at everyone and everything, everywhere.
That is a Vorschau of chapter one, in the the female protagonist, Josepheenah's point of view.
Here is a summary of the whole book:
Ever since Josepheenah sagte the words "I wish you'd just die, Eli," she has never stopped regretting them. Jo and Eli really got along until he decided to fall in Liebe with her. He loved the pool of brown in her eyes and the black mess of hair that she had always hated. Eli found her laugher to be Musik to his ears. Her voice was melodic and always on key. Jo always knew what to say to him, until she says the last words Eli ever heard her say. She took none of this seriously. But Eli would do anything Jo wanted. They were at her house at the time, so when Jo got up to get them a snack, he gave her what she asked for. Jo comes back to messages written on her mirror in blood, and balled up Liebe notes Eli never had the guts to give to her. Read the novel to get the story from both sides, and how everything turns out in the end.
Thanks for helping me out! x :)
blood fills the faces of my fantasies
no mercy,you're trying to put me down
i can see clearly as you're taking a swing, schaukel at me
come and i'll push Du to the ground
what are Du doing? what do Du think this is doing to me?
you're taking all my faith
what are Du leaving me now?!
i will make Du suffer just like Du made me suffer
i will watch Du screaming and begging for forgiveness
all my hate can not be bound
i will not be bound Von your darkest demons
so try to take my life and put me to the ground
i will follow Du and torture Du and i'll watch Du screaming
look at the bloody faces smiling at you,taking Du down and making Du drown
i wanna kill Du the same way Du killed me
leaving me thoughtless
Du can try to tell me that i'm worthless
but Du can not break me down
gonna take Du down because nothing in this world is going to save me
no mercy,you're trying to put me down
i can see clearly as you're taking a swing, schaukel at me
come and i'll push Du to the ground
what are Du doing? what do Du think this is doing to me?
you're taking all my faith
what are Du leaving me now?!
i will make Du suffer just like Du made me suffer
i will watch Du screaming and begging for forgiveness
all my hate can not be bound
i will not be bound Von your darkest demons
so try to take my life and put me to the ground
i will follow Du and torture Du and i'll watch Du screaming
look at the bloody faces smiling at you,taking Du down and making Du drown
i wanna kill Du the same way Du killed me
leaving me thoughtless
Du can try to tell me that i'm worthless
but Du can not break me down
gonna take Du down because nothing in this world is going to save me
The Tag of love,
Is here again,
This is tough,
From end to end,
A joyus occasion,
Is our salvation,
Without you,
I would be empty,
No one Von my side,
No one to embrace me when I'm tired,
Stuck within a baracading window,
Wishing oh so much,
That Du would show,
Just another day,
Where I would have to sit here and say,
Alone again,
Always alone,
Behind these eyes are tears of love,
Du are my one true,
Thank Du honey,
For being with me,
I Liebe Du so,
Please,
Never ever leave me
Von ScottishChic, dedicated to all whom I Liebe x
Is here again,
This is tough,
From end to end,
A joyus occasion,
Is our salvation,
Without you,
I would be empty,
No one Von my side,
No one to embrace me when I'm tired,
Stuck within a baracading window,
Wishing oh so much,
That Du would show,
Just another day,
Where I would have to sit here and say,
Alone again,
Always alone,
Behind these eyes are tears of love,
Du are my one true,
Thank Du honey,
For being with me,
I Liebe Du so,
Please,
Never ever leave me
Von ScottishChic, dedicated to all whom I Liebe x
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SINGERS THAT I KNOW :Katy Perry, Taylor Swift, Nicki Minaj,Justin Bieber, Rihanna, Ariana Grande, Selena Gomez,Jennifer Lopez, well i just Liebe every singers !!
Well i wish all the singer a big GOOD LUCK!!!! and also i Liebe every songs well they are great!! Hey all the singers make Mehr song for me please want to see Mehr !!! well just Liebe every singer!!, well my Favorit song is WORK Von Rihanna and what is yours?