This is a really Zufällig storyline I made up, but what do Du think?

A girl's mother has just recently left her father because of his loyal affair with his fellow works-woman. Now left in the hands of her father and abusive 'girlfriend' who has him wrapped around her finger, her only sancutary from them is a secret schmetterling garden. However once her father's girlfriend discovers it, she starts planning to destroy her 'daughter's' sancutary forever. However, when the girl finds the Flutter Eye hidden the garden, her father's girlfriend's ambitions to destroy the only place the girl calls home, become Mehr than what it seems.

So what Du all think? I also might need help with names, for the girl I like Eilir.