OK so the yesterday i asked on the club's Wand if i was to write a fanfic of the son of neptune if anyone would read it. someone replied saying "it depends on how good it is" so i then sagte that i will post chapter one as an Artikel to see what they think. peple replied saying "cool" and "thats a good idea". so i am posting chapter one to see what Du think, if Du like it can Du please comment, and if Du think its good enough, if Du think i should post it as a forum.
i dedicated this chapter to wisegurl, TheMagic Word and babbytreegrowth for commenting on my Wand post!!
The Son of Neptune
Chapter 1:
(Percy)
I opened my eyes to find myself lying on the beach; the waves were pounding the sand in a steady rhythm. There was a slight breeze. Why am I on a beach? Whoa I thought where am I? Then I thought who am I? Unfortunately I had no answer. This isn’t good, I thought. I felt totally empty like everything my life was, is now gone. Let me tell you, it feels horrible; there is nothing worse than finding yourself with absolutely nothing and having no clue what it is Du should be doing.
I felt compelled to be closer to the water so I got up and started walking along the water’s edge. When the water came in contact with my feet, I felt better, but I still had no idea what to do. Curse the gods. What, where did that come from? I was trying to think of any reason why I would think that but I was interrupted Von someone shouting.
‘Percy’ I heard a girl yell. I turned around and saw a girl running up to me. She was maybe 16 oder 17 years old, she had startling grey eyes and long, black curly hair.
‘There Du are Percy’, she sagte when she reached me ‘I was looking for you’.
‘Umm, who are you?’
‘Percy stop being stupid, Du know who I am’
‘No I don’t’
‘No Mehr joking around, we have to go my mum will be waiting’
She grabbed my arm and started to pull me along the beach.
‘I really don’t know who Du are, I woke up just then and I don’t remember anything’
‘Are Du being serious?’ she studied my face trying to decided if I was telling the truth, I guess my expression must have told her I was. ‘I’m Lizzy, your best friend; Du really don’t remember do you?’ She looked concerned.
‘No I rea-’
‘Hey Lizzy, what’s up?’
I turned around and saw a guy of around 17 standing Weiter to me. He had perfect hair, and a muscled chest, he look self obsessed. I don’t like him, I thought instantly. If only then I had known he would be the one to make my Tag go from bad to worse, I would have killed him right there. On instinct I put my hand in my pocket and pulled out a pen. On the side I sagte anaklusmos, which I somehow knew meant riptide. I had a feeling I was going to need it soon, I returned it to my pocket, without anyone noticing.
‘Uh, not much Henry’ she replied.
‘You going to surf, oder are Du wimping out?’ he sagte to me, I was sure he was thinking I was going to say no.
‘No, he’s going to surf’ Lizzy said.
‘Stop talking nerd, I wasn’t asking you’
‘I am going to surf’ I sagte going along with Lizzy, anything to make this guy shut up.
‘Whatever’ he sagte walking away.
‘I thought we were leaving’
‘No, he’s won every competition and is always bragging, Du are the only one who would be able to beat him’
‘But, I don’t know how to surf’
‘Oh’, she had a look on her face as though she was thinking of a way to get him to lose ‘well you’re a natural, I’ve seen Du surf your great, it comes naturally to you, so Du will be fine’
‘If Du say so’
‘It starts in five minutes, Du get ready and I’ll go get your board’
‘Kay’
I went into the change rooms to get ready. The changed room emptied and until the only one left was Henry. I tried to ignore him, when I was about to leave Henry came up me. He had a look on his face that sagte he was going to kill me.
‘I’ve known about Lizzy for a while now, but my mistress sagte the time wasn’t right, that I should wait. I never thought she meant that there would be another half-blood. I guess now is the right time’
‘What are Du talking about’ I sagte confused.
What did he mean Von half-blood?
‘It’s time to kill Du demigod’
He clicked his fingers and strong gust of wind hit me, I flew out the door crashing into Lizzy who was holding my surfboard. We fell to the ground. I stumbled while getting up, and then I turned around to help Lizzy.
‘Are Du okay’ I asked her.
‘Yeah, I’m fine’
Henry came out of the change rooms and glared at Lizzy. The breeze picked up to speed and was blowing sand everywhere, the waves were coming in faster, the tide rising. People were leaving the strand immediately, if they were close enough to catch sight of Henry they started running. I wonder what they were seeing.
‘Roman, Du will pay for my brothers’ deaths’ Henry sagte to Lizzy.
‘You’re crazy’ she replied.
Henry looked as though he was actually going to kill her. Henry’s body dissolved into smoke, his body was now swirling black vapour and his eyes like electrical sparks. He’s a storm spirit I thought. Just then three Mehr storm spirits appeared. So on instinct I pulled out my pen and uncapped it. It turned into a wickedly sharp celestial bronze sword, its weight felt perfectly balanced in my hands. Henry look startled and backed up for a moment, but then they came charging at me.
While I had them distracted with my sword Lizzy grabbed the surf board and whacked Henry with it. We were both surprised when it went flying to the sand 20 metres away. He was outraged, it was like he had turned into a psycho killer, and he pushed Lizzy down into the sand and then sent her flying into the water. The strand was now deserted.
‘Percy, Du need to kill them’ Lizzy gasped, struggling to get up.
I raised my sword and let my instincts take over, I swung at the first storm spirit my sword passed through his body and he dissolved into Gold dust. I felt a tug in my gut and I saw the waves rising and becoming Mehr violent. The waves were rising to 6 metres high. The waves distracted the other two storm spirits so it was easy to go up to them and swing, schaukel my sword. That left only Henry. I didn’t know if I was good enough to kill him, he sent a fierce wind into me, it knocked me to the ground and I fell onto my leg hard. I was surprised it didn’t break.
The tug in my gut was getting stronger and I realised I had a small tornado surrounding me, it was pushing Henry towards the water.
‘What, how are Du doing that, who are Du half-blood?’ Henry asked.
‘Percy, that’s amazing’ Lizzy said. She gasped ‘the water Percy, use the water’
I chose not to reply, but to do what she sagte Von pushing Henry into the water. I put on a strong burst of wind and he went flying into the water, the wave crashing into him. Electric volts surged throughout the water and even though Henry was a storm spirit it didn’t agree with him.
I could see he didn’t have much energy left.
‘Yeah, water doesn’t mix with lightning does it?’
He was so angry that he used the last of his energy to blast a strong gust of wind at Lizzy and send her flying out 15 metres into the ocean. I rushed to help her, even though I knew it would mean Henry would get away, but I had to help Lizzy.
I taube into the water and I felt exhilarated. I urged myself to get to Lizzy as fast as possible. When I reached her she was totally submerged. I pulled her head out of the water, and she took a deep breath.
‘Thanks’ she sagte gasping for air.
‘No problem’ I replied.
I pulled us back to the ufer we both lay down on the sand gasping for breath, once out of the water I felt exhausted. I couldn’t see Henry anywhere, I knew he had left, that guy was so crazy, who was his mistress I thought because if he’s bad she must be so much worse!
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Kommentar if Du like it!!
PS. i know its long ROFLOL.
i dedicated this chapter to wisegurl, TheMagic Word and babbytreegrowth for commenting on my Wand post!!
The Son of Neptune
Chapter 1:
(Percy)
I opened my eyes to find myself lying on the beach; the waves were pounding the sand in a steady rhythm. There was a slight breeze. Why am I on a beach? Whoa I thought where am I? Then I thought who am I? Unfortunately I had no answer. This isn’t good, I thought. I felt totally empty like everything my life was, is now gone. Let me tell you, it feels horrible; there is nothing worse than finding yourself with absolutely nothing and having no clue what it is Du should be doing.
I felt compelled to be closer to the water so I got up and started walking along the water’s edge. When the water came in contact with my feet, I felt better, but I still had no idea what to do. Curse the gods. What, where did that come from? I was trying to think of any reason why I would think that but I was interrupted Von someone shouting.
‘Percy’ I heard a girl yell. I turned around and saw a girl running up to me. She was maybe 16 oder 17 years old, she had startling grey eyes and long, black curly hair.
‘There Du are Percy’, she sagte when she reached me ‘I was looking for you’.
‘Umm, who are you?’
‘Percy stop being stupid, Du know who I am’
‘No I don’t’
‘No Mehr joking around, we have to go my mum will be waiting’
She grabbed my arm and started to pull me along the beach.
‘I really don’t know who Du are, I woke up just then and I don’t remember anything’
‘Are Du being serious?’ she studied my face trying to decided if I was telling the truth, I guess my expression must have told her I was. ‘I’m Lizzy, your best friend; Du really don’t remember do you?’ She looked concerned.
‘No I rea-’
‘Hey Lizzy, what’s up?’
I turned around and saw a guy of around 17 standing Weiter to me. He had perfect hair, and a muscled chest, he look self obsessed. I don’t like him, I thought instantly. If only then I had known he would be the one to make my Tag go from bad to worse, I would have killed him right there. On instinct I put my hand in my pocket and pulled out a pen. On the side I sagte anaklusmos, which I somehow knew meant riptide. I had a feeling I was going to need it soon, I returned it to my pocket, without anyone noticing.
‘Uh, not much Henry’ she replied.
‘You going to surf, oder are Du wimping out?’ he sagte to me, I was sure he was thinking I was going to say no.
‘No, he’s going to surf’ Lizzy said.
‘Stop talking nerd, I wasn’t asking you’
‘I am going to surf’ I sagte going along with Lizzy, anything to make this guy shut up.
‘Whatever’ he sagte walking away.
‘I thought we were leaving’
‘No, he’s won every competition and is always bragging, Du are the only one who would be able to beat him’
‘But, I don’t know how to surf’
‘Oh’, she had a look on her face as though she was thinking of a way to get him to lose ‘well you’re a natural, I’ve seen Du surf your great, it comes naturally to you, so Du will be fine’
‘If Du say so’
‘It starts in five minutes, Du get ready and I’ll go get your board’
‘Kay’
I went into the change rooms to get ready. The changed room emptied and until the only one left was Henry. I tried to ignore him, when I was about to leave Henry came up me. He had a look on his face that sagte he was going to kill me.
‘I’ve known about Lizzy for a while now, but my mistress sagte the time wasn’t right, that I should wait. I never thought she meant that there would be another half-blood. I guess now is the right time’
‘What are Du talking about’ I sagte confused.
What did he mean Von half-blood?
‘It’s time to kill Du demigod’
He clicked his fingers and strong gust of wind hit me, I flew out the door crashing into Lizzy who was holding my surfboard. We fell to the ground. I stumbled while getting up, and then I turned around to help Lizzy.
‘Are Du okay’ I asked her.
‘Yeah, I’m fine’
Henry came out of the change rooms and glared at Lizzy. The breeze picked up to speed and was blowing sand everywhere, the waves were coming in faster, the tide rising. People were leaving the strand immediately, if they were close enough to catch sight of Henry they started running. I wonder what they were seeing.
‘Roman, Du will pay for my brothers’ deaths’ Henry sagte to Lizzy.
‘You’re crazy’ she replied.
Henry looked as though he was actually going to kill her. Henry’s body dissolved into smoke, his body was now swirling black vapour and his eyes like electrical sparks. He’s a storm spirit I thought. Just then three Mehr storm spirits appeared. So on instinct I pulled out my pen and uncapped it. It turned into a wickedly sharp celestial bronze sword, its weight felt perfectly balanced in my hands. Henry look startled and backed up for a moment, but then they came charging at me.
While I had them distracted with my sword Lizzy grabbed the surf board and whacked Henry with it. We were both surprised when it went flying to the sand 20 metres away. He was outraged, it was like he had turned into a psycho killer, and he pushed Lizzy down into the sand and then sent her flying into the water. The strand was now deserted.
‘Percy, Du need to kill them’ Lizzy gasped, struggling to get up.
I raised my sword and let my instincts take over, I swung at the first storm spirit my sword passed through his body and he dissolved into Gold dust. I felt a tug in my gut and I saw the waves rising and becoming Mehr violent. The waves were rising to 6 metres high. The waves distracted the other two storm spirits so it was easy to go up to them and swing, schaukel my sword. That left only Henry. I didn’t know if I was good enough to kill him, he sent a fierce wind into me, it knocked me to the ground and I fell onto my leg hard. I was surprised it didn’t break.
The tug in my gut was getting stronger and I realised I had a small tornado surrounding me, it was pushing Henry towards the water.
‘What, how are Du doing that, who are Du half-blood?’ Henry asked.
‘Percy, that’s amazing’ Lizzy said. She gasped ‘the water Percy, use the water’
I chose not to reply, but to do what she sagte Von pushing Henry into the water. I put on a strong burst of wind and he went flying into the water, the wave crashing into him. Electric volts surged throughout the water and even though Henry was a storm spirit it didn’t agree with him.
I could see he didn’t have much energy left.
‘Yeah, water doesn’t mix with lightning does it?’
He was so angry that he used the last of his energy to blast a strong gust of wind at Lizzy and send her flying out 15 metres into the ocean. I rushed to help her, even though I knew it would mean Henry would get away, but I had to help Lizzy.
I taube into the water and I felt exhilarated. I urged myself to get to Lizzy as fast as possible. When I reached her she was totally submerged. I pulled her head out of the water, and she took a deep breath.
‘Thanks’ she sagte gasping for air.
‘No problem’ I replied.
I pulled us back to the ufer we both lay down on the sand gasping for breath, once out of the water I felt exhausted. I couldn’t see Henry anywhere, I knew he had left, that guy was so crazy, who was his mistress I thought because if he’s bad she must be so much worse!
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Kommentar if Du like it!!
PS. i know its long ROFLOL.
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