Well... This is my firsts Fan fiction so hope Du like it!

I wrote a poem about Nate's feeling for Serena when she was with Dan.

He could see her long beautiful golden hair which she always flicked as the wind moved it.
He could see her deep blue eyes just as deep and blue as the sea.
He could see her pretty rosa lips which he wanted to KISS so badly.
He could see her, who he desperately wanted.

Her eye caught his, she was came slowly towards him.
She was there, right in front of him.
He closed his eyes and held his breath as she touched his golden brown hair, slowly coming towards his lips.

A big blow of wind came towards him.
His hair moved as the wind danced around it.
As he opened his eyes, he saw her.
He saw her hand in hand with him.
And he wished one Tag she'd be his.

Well what did Du think please Kommentar oder tell me how I can improve.