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Is this plot good? How can I improve?

Plot: in future England there are even Mehr homophobes and discrimination. Homosexuals are sent to a town where they are killed after a year. A boy decides to break out, but when they're escaping the guards catch them. The boy is killed but the others escape. There is then a war for gay rights.

Characters:
Boys:
Achlad Bouvier (younger twin, rosa hair, yellow eyes, cat ears and tail.)
Aberthol Bouvier(older twin same looks)
Luci (Lucifer, Satan, red eyes, black hair)
Ai (Luci's boyfriend, black eyes, brown hair)
James Handel (blonde hair blue eyes)
Hayden Lamar (James's boyfriend, red hair, green eyes)
Finnegan Courtland Maloish (Leader of the group, blonde hair, dark green eyes)
March Guest (guy who dies at the beginning, curly long purple hair, blue eyes)
Inigo Forrest (Lucinda's boyfriend and brother, light red hair, brown eyes)
Blane Cellinton (Finnegan's friend, totally doesn't matter)
Lewellyn Bouvier (king of Cauldwell, doesn't matter)
Archer Cauldwell (creator of Cauldwell), not sure if he even comes in) 


Girls 
Lucinda Forrest (robot spy, light red hair, brown eyes)
Nina Wellz (Finnegan's friend, black hair, brown eyes)
Joy Barker (Finnegan's friend, brown hair, blue eyes)
Rihanna Bouvier (Queen of Cauldwell, doesn't matter)
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I was in a rush, so if you're confused look at my Kommentare on panisepic's answer. If you're still confused ask me about it.
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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Also if Du want to know personality traits tell me.
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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The murderers do the murders so there will be Mehr good, kind of like Death Note (if you've watched it oder know what it's about). Satan isn't bad in the story, he was sent to hell for being gay and he doesn't really torture the sinners God sends to him.
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panisepic said:
Why are there Mehr homophobes and discrimination in the future; there is a lot going on now to end this so what happened to make it all turn this drastically south?
Why are they killed after a year?
Why do they have cat ears and tails?
Why are they the only ones with animal traits?
Why is Satan in this?
The heck, robot spy? Why a robot? 'Cause it's the future? What brought robot spies about?
How does this group, that has been locked up and shunned from society for at least year, escape and then build enough of a team to wage a war?

Not the worst but could use some Mehr explaining. I mean I understand that this is just a short Beschreibung but right now Du seem to just have some unnecessary things if Du don't have a good reason for them.
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I was in a rush when I typed this, sorry. I'll explain it.
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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I'm not quit sure on the first one, I'll work on it. They give them a Jahr to try to become straight, but since Du can't they end up killing them. In the future people ended up finding some Mehr fosil fules and combined human and animal DNAs. They're not, they're just the only main characters with it, one of them can turn itno a cat person. I'll explain in another Kommentar box sice it's kinda long. I'll explain robot's in another one too. They're already big enough of a team, and they Mitmachen with another group of people later in the story.
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Thanks! I am working on the first one, I hadn't really thought about that. (^_^)
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BlondLionEzel said:
I like it!
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Thanks!
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springely said:
Good so far, but in the future this is actually less likely to happen.
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I know, but I'm still working a little on it.
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