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Is this character a Mary-Sue?

He seems like he might be a Mary-Sue to me, so I was wondering what Du all thought.

Name: Takumi

Age: 17

Gender: male

Looks: long, curly, purple hair, ice blue eyes

Personality: slutty, nice, shy, he's very affectionate since he never got very much affection when he was younger

Backstory: he had a normal childhood and good parents. When he was 14 he got a boyfriend. He kept it a secret from his parents since they were homophobic as well as most people in the place where he lived. When he was 15 he was raped Von his boyfriend and tried to leave him. His boyfriend didn't let him and abused him for a few months until Takumi's friend got him away from him.

If Du need any Mehr info let me know in the Kommentare and I'll tell you. Also please answer honestly, I want to improve him. Don't just say Du don't like him though, because then I don't know how to fix him. Thank you!
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I changed his name from a Japanese name to a British name.
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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oder maybe it was Welsh...idk.
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Book-Freak said:
I'm not sure if he could be called a Gary-Stu, but I think there is a contradiction in the information Du gave: Du say he had a normal childhood and good parents but also that he didn't get much attention as a child... If they were good parents, wouldn't he have gotten enough attention?
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Thanks! There were a few parts I skipped in the backstory, so that's why it contradicted the other parts.
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
egyptprincess7 said:
He's not a Gary-Stu from the looks of it. I don't understand though how his personality can be slutty? And Du did contradict yourself in the backstory. Otherwise he's fine.
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Thanks! Why can't slutty be in the personality?
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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I mean it can be a personality trait but no were on this bio does it prove that he's slutty so it's no point in calling him slutty.
I-Luv-L posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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Well I didn't mention it I guess, I meant to, but he actually does start sleeping with other men.
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
BlondLionEzel said:
He's not a Mary Sue
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Thanks!
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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Welcome :)
BlondLionEzel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
neonClouds said:
"Name: Takumi"
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 "Name: Takumi"
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???
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
MineTurtle5 said:
Here, check out this link:

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It's really good for helping Du know if your character is a Mary Sue/ Gary Stu. Also, Du can check out this article. I've found it quite helpful:

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Thanks! I'll check it out!
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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You're welcome! :)
MineTurtle5 posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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used it for al my characters, it was great! Thanks!
misscrazel posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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You're welcome! :)
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