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please read this!

tell me if Du like oder not!



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please!
 iloveduncan6 posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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r-pattz said:
Du want me to tell Du if I like it oder not? Ok. I don't. Now I suppose I should go into the reasons why, yeah?

1.) Grammar. It was non-existant. Lack of proper grammar is a pet peeve of mine. Use the shift key. Write in sentences.

2.) The characters had no life. They were cliche and boring and acted exactly average. If you're going to create a character and write a story, make it different. Interesting. Mary Sues are a big no-no.

3.) This really wasn't even a story at all, oder even a play. It was just lines that were being said. Use descriptions, use the five senses to describe the scene and the people, add action, let the reader see all that is happening.
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>:(
iloveduncan6 posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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What? Du asked my opinion. Du can't get angry over something Du sagte Du wanted. I won't pet Du and feed your ego if your Schreiben isn't amazing.
r-pattz posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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they are right
Bluestar208 posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
Jeffersonian said:
I didn't really see any plot, Du need a plot and a background and something defining about the characters.
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listen... that was the first story i ever made. i know there are some bumps in there but i tried!
iloveduncan6 posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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well then since it's your first story, good job for your first time
Jeffersonian posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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:/
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