what do Du guys tk about this first line of this new poem that i'm writing?

Du tell me that Du
are forever haunted
Von the memories that
controls every-part of
your, body, mind, and heart.
 eriemorgan posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr
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MidnightTokyo47 said:
I think it's beautiful!
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posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr 
Kat-chan said:
That is absolutely deep and gorgeous.
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posted Vor mehr als einem Jahr 
FlyWithMeNickJ said:
i like it it's deep i'd like to hear the rest when it is done
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